Storyboard Roughs

I’ve been working on storyboarding a well-known folktale. Here are a few of the board roughs in pencil. I’m thinking of reworking them in Photoshop. I would really covet some constructive feedback from those of you in the know.

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6 Responses to “Storyboard Roughs”

  1. Emma Says:

    Retelling a fairytale is good practice – you don’t have to worry about whether the story works or not; you just have to worry about telling it right.

    How big (or small) are you drawing? I know these are roughs, but it looks like you’re drawing really small and it’s cramping your framing/clarity.

    I’m missing an establishing shot of the inside of the cabin… so that we can see the geography. Looking back and forth, I figure it’s Hansel and Gretel, and they’re kind of eavesdropping from the landing at the top of the stairs..?

    Keep going though, it’s good practice!

  2. labsquad Says:

    Emma-

    Thanks for the sublime storyboarding sagacity.
    You guessed it, Hansel and Gretel it is. I’ve had birds on the brain lately and I got it into my head to create a “logical” alternate camera point by introducing a crow or sparrow who is more of a passive observing aiding in scene transitions (or possibly a kindly fairy in disguise). Remember the feather in Forest Gump?

    I’m drawing at approximately 3″x2.5″. What’s a good frame size to use?

  3. Emma Says:

    Yeah, I see what you’re going for. Maybe it would make more sense to start with Hansel and Gretel – there’s a natural place for birds to come in when they’re eating the trail of breadcrumbs, and that happens pretty early on.

    A good practice to get into is writing out the logical beats of the story. Something like:

    -The family is too poor to feed the children
    -So instead of going hungry herself, the mother talks the father into abandoning them
    -The children overhear this
    -When father takes them out into the woods, Hansel sneaks bread in his pocket; he has a plan
    -Hansel leaves a trail of crumbs
    -Little does Hansel know, birds are eating the crumbs
    -Father ditches the children
    -Hansel and Gretel are lost; the crumbs are gone

    And so on. It helps to write down what the parts of the story are; telling the story to yourself or to someone else REALLY helps because it becomes immediately apparent what the IMPORTANT parts of the story are (they are the ones you make sure to tell, or else you have to backtrack later and tell them again). It’s a lot easier to storyboard when you know it beginning to end.

    I would try doing your drawings on blank index cards (or that size). It’s small enough that you can see the whole thing at a glance, you can rearrange shots easily, and the cards are big enough that you won’t be so cramped.

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  6. Bill Bartmann Says:

    Cool site, love the info.

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